Kinh Thi
(2023-08-02, 03:23 PM)TiểuHồLy Wrote: Hai bài thơ của nàng không kém chất lượng mô. Tứ thơ thanh tao nhẹ nhàng và đỉnh về vần/biệt lệ/cấu trúc. Tulip4

Thơ TNBC luật gồm có bằng trắc, niêm, vận, cấu trúc, và đối xứng. Thơ TNTT chỉ cần luật bằng trắc, niêm, cấu trúc, và vận; không có đối xứng ha nàng. Bài thơ này của nàng nếu nói về dạng Thất Ngôn Tứ Tuyệt thì đúng hơn là TNBC. Vì vậy khi nàng đăng bài thì nên phân ra 4 câu đầu và 4 câu sau chứ không để chung 8 câu liên kết sẽ làm các độc giả lầm tưởng đây là thơ TNBC rồi họ sẽ chỉ trích thành ra nó không hay cho tác giả cũng như độc giả há? 

Bữa nay THL mơ mộng lãng mạn cùng nàng với bài TNBC. Nàng để ý câu 3,4,5, và 6 đối xứng của THL nha? 
Ví dụ: 
Xin hoàng đế vẽ (câu 3) (động từ=Xin; danh từ=hoàng đế; động từ=vẽ) (BBTT)
Đãi ái phi đàn (câu 4 đối xứng câu 3) (động từ=Đãi; danh từ=ái phi; động từ=đàn) (TTBB)

Mộng Duyên Ký - III
(Nhất Vận - Ngũ Độ Thanh)

Cưỡi đỉnh Hành Sơn mượn ánh ngà
Đem vành vạnh bóng điểm thành ta
Xin hoàng đế vẽ muôn sầu thả
Đãi ái phi đàn vạn thảm ra 
Thưởng Nguyệt Nha Tuyền xem cát nhã 
Thăm Hồ Vạn Đảo ngắm đò qua 
Tình luôn chặt chẽ dù giông giá
Đố thể hàn băng...vẫn đậm đà.

Tulip4 Heavy-black-heart4 Tulip4

Bài thơ rất tuyệt vời , bến nầy Thu chỉ được ngắm , khó mà theo được nàng

Tulip4 Heavy-black-heart4
Tàn nắng hoa phai hồn đi lạc
Thu về trước ngõ mộng chưa sang





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Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 12:54 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 12:57 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-19, 03:41 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 09:22 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-19, 04:19 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 08:09 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-19, 09:01 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 10:21 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-19, 08:50 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 01:14 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 01:15 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 01:17 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 01:18 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 01:20 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 01:23 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 01:37 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-15, 03:24 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 03:37 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-15, 07:09 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 07:46 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-15, 10:13 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-23, 10:23 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-23, 03:53 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Hư vô - 2023-07-24, 02:38 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 08:08 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Hư vô - 2023-07-27, 04:22 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-27, 07:40 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-24, 10:48 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-24, 10:47 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 08:06 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-25, 10:45 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-23, 10:21 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-23, 03:50 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-24, 10:44 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-23, 10:17 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-24, 08:49 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 09:01 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-24, 09:17 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-24, 10:59 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 08:04 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-25, 11:36 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-24, 10:54 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-24, 06:46 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-25, 10:38 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-25, 12:31 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TTTT - 2023-07-25, 05:56 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-25, 08:52 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-26, 01:49 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-26, 06:58 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-27, 02:12 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-27, 02:25 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-28, 09:48 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-28, 10:20 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-29, 11:08 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-29, 01:11 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-07-29, 05:40 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-30, 03:41 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-30, 02:43 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-30, 03:46 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-31, 12:12 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-08-01, 08:54 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-08-02, 10:16 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-08-02, 03:23 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-08-03, 06:55 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-08-03, 10:00 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-26, 09:46 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-27, 02:25 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-27, 07:38 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-28, 09:44 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-28, 10:11 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-29, 11:00 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-30, 01:04 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-31, 12:18 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-31, 12:58 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-15, 01:54 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-15, 02:16 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-16, 08:07 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-16, 10:41 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-16, 05:13 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-16, 05:28 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-16, 05:37 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-16, 06:07 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-16, 02:59 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-16, 05:04 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-18, 03:11 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-18, 05:27 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-18, 07:56 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-18, 08:25 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-18, 10:15 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-18, 10:48 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-18, 11:37 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-18, 05:19 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-18, 11:44 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-18, 11:48 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-18, 11:53 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-18, 11:56 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 12:06 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-19, 01:09 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 08:48 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-19, 01:17 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 02:24 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-19, 06:15 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 08:07 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-19, 10:30 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 10:40 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-19, 10:45 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-20, 08:21 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-19, 11:09 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-20, 08:25 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-20, 07:12 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-19, 10:43 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-19, 08:54 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 02:23 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-19, 09:27 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-19, 10:09 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by Tuy duyen - 2023-07-19, 11:39 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-20, 06:30 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-21, 01:05 AM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-21, 05:42 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Mãi Yêu Thương - 2023-07-22, 03:46 AM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-21, 06:00 AM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-21, 10:38 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-22, 08:44 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-24, 08:46 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 09:00 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-24, 09:15 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 09:29 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-24, 06:39 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 07:57 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-24, 08:14 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-24, 10:15 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-25, 08:51 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-25, 10:47 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-27, 02:33 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-27, 07:48 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-28, 10:10 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-07-28, 10:33 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-28, 03:16 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-07-28, 08:31 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-28, 08:51 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-28, 10:01 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-29, 10:56 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-30, 01:01 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-30, 06:01 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-08-01, 06:38 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-07-29, 05:37 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-29, 06:09 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-07-29, 06:40 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Thuctinh - 2023-07-29, 08:24 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-30, 01:24 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-07-30, 11:20 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-08-01, 06:40 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by RungHoang - 2023-07-30, 01:20 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-07-31, 11:59 AM
RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-07-31, 01:40 PM
RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-08-01, 12:30 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-08-02, 10:08 AM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-29, 12:53 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-28, 06:54 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TiểuHồLy - 2023-07-29, 12:58 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-08-02, 02:20 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by Green Grass - 2023-08-03, 02:50 PM
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RE: Kinh Thi - by TanThu - 2023-08-04, 11:54 AM
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